tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post2921078129940473058..comments2023-08-11T03:34:20.125-06:00Comments on Windows to My Life: Writing to Remember: Bronze Fury Vignette- ScreenplayLibraryDragon/Storykeeperhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13695194443477630515noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-40710141634250104242012-03-12T21:35:58.235-06:002012-03-12T21:35:58.235-06:00Love it! Very creative! I could see the Bronze F...Love it! Very creative! I could see the Bronze Fury with no one behind the wheel...great image!Jana Wilsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-61550309228284841962012-03-12T17:07:36.498-06:002012-03-12T17:07:36.498-06:00Very creative format! I love your ending.Very creative format! I love your ending.Mary Helen Genschnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-32406105148496579832012-03-12T12:28:43.187-06:002012-03-12T12:28:43.187-06:00I love your choice of genre for this slice! It wo...I love your choice of genre for this slice! It works so well. I can't really imagine life from your angle (I'm closer to 6' tall over here ... though not as close as I'd like!). Your Bronze Fury sounds fabulous!GirlGriotnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-29771986843618815972012-03-10T21:47:43.990-07:002012-03-10T21:47:43.990-07:00You sound like my sister-in-law! When she joined ...You sound like my sister-in-law! When she joined the Air Force, she was one of the smallest recruits they ever had. They had to special order her children's boots because her feet are so little! She got to wear her Nikes for most of basic training!<br /><br />Keep drivin', Ruth.Elaine Watersnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-64546082829353817092012-03-10T19:33:48.813-07:002012-03-10T19:33:48.813-07:00You're so creative! I love this idea! You're so creative! I love this idea! Linda Kulpnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-73230443895682989672012-03-10T13:46:08.782-07:002012-03-10T13:46:08.782-07:00Great imagery of the large trunk and the car drivi...Great imagery of the large trunk and the car driving itself. Love the new form--way to try something different!Maya Woodallnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-91977905025518818712012-03-10T09:07:23.263-07:002012-03-10T09:07:23.263-07:00Ruth, I, too, stand at about 5 feet tall, and I to...Ruth, I, too, stand at about 5 feet tall, and I totally identify with the teasing about the car driving itself. I thought your risk-taking really paid off on this one. I could 'see' the footage as I read. Fun!Jamanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-34645188377664642672012-03-10T08:27:30.889-07:002012-03-10T08:27:30.889-07:00Thank you for taking a risk and trying a screenpla...Thank you for taking a risk and trying a screenplay. It inspires me to do the same and that inspiration and that has a ripple effect for classrooms of kids.Dana Schreinernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-47634399809485570752012-03-10T07:42:44.682-07:002012-03-10T07:42:44.682-07:00Love it! Great experiment with a new style. This s...Love it! Great experiment with a new style. This slice reminded me of a story of a babysitter my brother and I had when we were little--you couldn't see her driving the car either and when someone rear ended her one day her wig flew off. The man rushed to the car thinking he'd decapitated her. Maybe I can write that story this week : ) Thank you for the inspiration!<br />~Lee AnnLee Ann Spillanehttp://twitter.com/spillarkenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-91429219890621252482012-03-10T07:34:17.628-07:002012-03-10T07:34:17.628-07:00How great is this, a screenplay! In the style of ...How great is this, a screenplay! In the style of the movie greats, you've just created a scene that is vivid, humorous, and moves along (I had trouble trying to convey that). It, like the others, is hilarious. I remember those old cars. Just think, we learned to parallel park with them! I love all of it, Ruth but "It was made to withstand the ravages of life" says much!Linda Baiehttp://teacherdance.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-50903513836607765582012-03-10T07:01:43.022-07:002012-03-10T07:01:43.022-07:00I am still short and my husband's new pickup i...I am still short and my husband's new pickup is Toyota Tundra. As part of the negotiation they agreed to put pedal extenders on the gas and brake pedal. They are much better than pillows.Storykeeper Ferrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-67203830215134396472012-03-10T06:58:52.220-07:002012-03-10T06:58:52.220-07:00First I want to ask did you wake him? I am please...First I want to ask did you wake him? I am pleased that you enjoyed this story. I'm glad you laughed.Storykeeper Ferrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-10806044204084978052012-03-10T06:57:17.406-07:002012-03-10T06:57:17.406-07:00It was really fun to take the risk and try it. It...It was really fun to take the risk and try it. It made me feel good when it worked. I told my husband last night that it kind of amazes me that people I have never met are laughing at the same stories I've shared with friends and family. I am learning that this writing community has become "extended" friends. Thank you.Storykeeper Ferrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-72738654166041394482012-03-10T06:47:53.520-07:002012-03-10T06:47:53.520-07:00It thrills me to hear the "connections to sel...It thrills me to hear the "connections to self" that people have shared. It becomes a genuine conversation. Storykeeper Ferrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-68344997538787465462012-03-10T06:38:40.732-07:002012-03-10T06:38:40.732-07:00I worried about that. It is good to know that it ...I worried about that. It is good to know that it worked in this format. Storykeeper Ferrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-62311357531166759992012-03-10T06:36:28.050-07:002012-03-10T06:36:28.050-07:00Katie - From reading your comment I surmised that...Katie - From reading your comment I surmised that a fist bump was like a high five. I looked it up and had it confirmed. So thank you very much!Storykeeper Ferrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-88320097680751290492012-03-10T06:35:02.352-07:002012-03-10T06:35:02.352-07:00The dialogue is very close to the actual conversat...The dialogue is very close to the actual conversation that happened. So I have had an easier time working it in.Storykeeper Ferrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-22832892195556538002012-03-10T06:33:12.603-07:002012-03-10T06:33:12.603-07:00Thank you. This writing community is so very enco...Thank you. This writing community is so very encouraging. You make taking risks ok. I didn't know I was going to try this until I sat down to write. <br /><br />I would encourage anyone who wants to experiment with different writing styles to try. This piece was fairly short and straight forward. It lent itself to this format. It is the first time I have ever tried to write a screenplay or even a play for that matter.Storykeeper Ferrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-65213876370300497602012-03-10T06:14:45.446-07:002012-03-10T06:14:45.446-07:00Laugh! Nice job. Maybe I'll have to follow you...Laugh! Nice job. Maybe I'll have to follow your lead and take a risk with some new writing styles. Mariaselkenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-22453262981743852542012-03-10T06:11:57.154-07:002012-03-10T06:11:57.154-07:00Bravo Ruth,
I think dialogue writing is the hardes...Bravo Ruth,<br />I think dialogue writing is the hardest. Great challenge!Bonnie K.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-55814593333045426312012-03-10T06:09:12.248-07:002012-03-10T06:09:12.248-07:00Think I'm going to go with the *fist bump* on ...Think I'm going to go with the *fist bump* on this one.<br /><br />*Fist Bump*Katie Muhtarishttp://literacyspark.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-78822272703784263812012-03-10T05:49:52.120-07:002012-03-10T05:49:52.120-07:00New technique , but same funny, engaging voice - I...New technique , but same funny, engaging voice - I loved "hearing" this slice through this format.Taranoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-49795791404386245592012-03-10T05:06:22.028-07:002012-03-10T05:06:22.028-07:00Very funny.I loved how you wrote your story. You b...Very funny.I loved how you wrote your story. You brought back my own memories of my very proud father bringing home a green Plymouth Fury for my first car. I opened the trunk to make sure there wasn't a small family inside. I, like you am short. I am 5 feet and I had to use pillows as well to touch the pedals. I felt like I was driving a tank.Megouellettenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-83136563994936632802012-03-10T03:25:32.021-07:002012-03-10T03:25:32.021-07:00:)
Love how the play format captures the deadpan d...:)<br />Love how the play format captures the deadpan dialogue. I could "see" the scene unfolding (even the car)<br />KevinKevinHodgsonhttp://twitter.com/dogtraxnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-573284323132271567.post-4099599225211729192012-03-09T23:33:50.053-07:002012-03-09T23:33:50.053-07:00Oh, dear! I'm reading this late at night/earl...Oh, dear! I'm reading this late at night/early morning and trying not to laugh so I don't wake my husband up. "Then who wasn't driving your car?" Bronze Fury travels down the road - no visible driver." My favorites. Tooo funny! Whoops, hope I didn't wake him up!Donna Smithnoreply@blogger.com